2204: Six Sentence Story

Vienne Saturday Market image 1836

Part 9: Brigid’s Diary, The Market at Vienne

To Bear Witness

We stepped off the boat at Vienne, and the town met us with a quiet menace — uneven stones slick with thaw, my hems dragging through muck, Felreil’s boots slipping as if the ground itself had learned mistrust.

Saturday market pulled us by the nose: horse dung steaming in cold air, fresh bread sweet enough to dull the stink of drains, while a woman and a baker argued the price of bread and grain with elbows and curses sharper than hunger.

I paid quickly for camomile, arnica, lavender, and Felreil took my arm before the foreign curl in our tongue became a red flag; the crowd thickening toward something wanting to be a riot.

We escaped through forgotten gates and found shelter among jasmine vines in the Roman ruins, where an old man with hardship crusted into him said, “I’m mad — they all say so,” and showed me the sores on his hand and leg while muttering that the old ways were dying.

Felreil looked at the buried stones and said, “Buried, but not dead,” and the man answered, “…dead man walking,” and I pulled Felreil aside to whisper, “Seer—some eyes look straight through time,” — an unsettling prophecy from a stranger’s gaze.

If this diary is found, let it be said plainly: we ran before the law could name our faces, and that was not for guilt — but arithmetic.


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Written for Denise’s Six Sentence Story including the word “flag”.  Some images created with Midjourney; all writing is authentically my own original work. ©Misky 2006-2026.

15 responses to “2204: Six Sentence Story”

  1. You wrote a perfect SFS, Symphony For the Senses, Marilyn. 👏

    I had to look up a few words ( and I love that) and then I found myself feeling the traction ( or rather the absence of) of the place you penned.
    Sounds, smells, muscles trying to balance bodies… and aye, the feelings & thoughts.
    All orchestrated masterfully under the metronomic tempo of Agnes’ violin.

    If this chapter, the Ninth, is the last part of Brigid’s Diary then Thank you for a memorable trip in time and hearts.

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    1. I am delighted that are enjoyed every element of this week’s Six. I am humbled and smiling. Thank you.

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  2. Nice phrase: “curses sharper than hunger” And: “some eyes look straight through time”

    You described the smells in that market very well. Nicely told.

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    1. Thank you very much, Frank.

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  3. Unusual I hit play on the video before reading. Day’s first coffee in hand, dead quiet before the stirring of life, I read what appears as Brigid’s final diary entry. The totality of the moment wrapped in “uneven stones slick with thaw” as “fresh bread sweet enough to dull the stink of drains” softens the undercurrent of tension. Brigid’s new world, fraught with challenge, danger, uncertainty, as yet withholding the promise of hope and a settled and safe life. As always, last sentence, perfection, Misky.

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    1. Their journey continues, Denise — but I am delighted that you thought this might be the final entry because under certain circumstances, such as they’re facing, wondering if you’ll escape makes one wonder about survival. And leaving you with that impression is a big thumbs-up in my book … so thank you!

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  4. Beautifully penned. I am still enjoying this… what will happen next, I’m wondering. Also those interesting things about the Roman places by there – I had a little look on Google. V good.

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    1. I’m delighted that you Googled it! Vienne is a special place, and yes, I’ve tromped through those lanes, walked on those setts where the old gullies still run down the middle. I’m so happy that you enjoyed reading it.

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  5. put me down for a ‘coolito‘ on the phrase ‘Saturday market pulled us by the nose…’

    a bit in simpatico with Nick’s comment, found myself spending way more time with the primary image searching for clues even before reading the words

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    1. That image is like a Where’s Waldo picture! It would make one devilish jigsaw puzzle.

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  6. I love that style of writing so much for the blog-hop every week I wait and wait and am never displeased.

    Seriously. And that last line was so good! I love that diary. Seriously.

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    1. Thank you! I am so happy to know that you enjoy reading it. Thanks!

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  7. “Menace” in every image and in the spaces between. I am undone. How do you do this, unfailingly intense? And yes, as others have commented, this is beautiful!

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    1. Thank you so much, Liz! (whispering in your ear… I have the advantage of actually visiting each of the cities and towns in this story several times whilst driving south to Cannes and Nice).

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  8. “As if the ground itself had learned mistrust.” What an amazing line, and a fabulous continuing story.

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