3103: Six Sentence Story

B&W image of a steam paddle-wheel boat on the Rhône River

Brigid’s Diary: Part 06, Lyon

First Motion on the Rhône Steamboat

The steamboat did not startle me; it announced itself, breath thick with coal, pistons beating like a heart forced into discipline, smoke writing its claim across the Rhône as though the river had been waiting to be corrected.

I watched the paddle bite water and felt the current resist, then yield, and understood that heat does not persuade …it compels.

Felreil smiled at my questions: how does it know, what keeps it alive …and answered, “Fire, patience, and men who listen,” but it seemed to me that fire listens to no one once fed.

Below deck the engine kept time without mercy, a rhythm too deliberate to be called natural, and I thought how easily men mistake domination for progress when the noise is loud enough.

When the shoreline began to slide backward, I did not laugh; I felt instead the quiet theft of distance, villages reduced to passing scenery, the river narrowed to a corridor.

If this is how the age intends to travel, burning forward and naming it advancement, then we must learn its grammar quickly, before it decides that rivers, like people, are only useful when ordered to obey.


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Written for Denise’s Six Sentence Story including the word “order”.  Some images created with Midjourney; all writing is authentically my own original work.©Misky 2006-2026.

19 responses to “3103: Six Sentence Story”

  1. “heart forced into discipline, paddle biting water”–these are the discriptives which raise your writing above the rest. I have just enough envy to motivate me to go higher. Bravo.

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    1. Such a lovely comment to read this morning. Thank you. ☺️

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      1. You’re welcome, and I’m always 100% sincere😊

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  2. Originally I was going to faun over this line- I thought how easily men mistake domination for progress when the noise is loud enough.- but when I read that last paragraph, I was gobsmacked! Well done!

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    1. Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed reading it.

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  3. If we learn the grammar, do we use our words to persuade, firmly, or distract as we slip out the back door?

    Very powerful stuff this cloudy, gray morning!

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    1. Some will always slip out the back door, but not everyone. Glad you enjoyed it, Liz. By the way, spring is coming! 🌷

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  4. Another excellent episode! Almost a huge barge on the Rhône.

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    1. Thank you, and yes, almost a barge, and that is where the paddle came in — the current is so strong that it was the only way to control the ship.

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  5. I totally agree with Cale.

    Your descriptions are very good

    I can’t even say what I like the most, the passing scenery I can almost see as if it was a movie (every time I read you)

    or the thoughts themselves.

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    1. I am so delighted that you enjoyed reading it. Thank you so very much!

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  6. My vote (for ‘damn, nice line’) goes to:

    …heat does not persuade …it compels.

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    1. Thank you, Clark.

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  7. Good point: “heat does not persuade …it compels.”

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  8. Perhaps it was rereading with the audio playing, Misky, that enhanced a sense of reticence within Brigid… spiked with distrust. In part, towards her method of travel, more so for the unknown that lies ahead. An unexpectedly interactive Six!

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    1. Oh perfect! Perfect! That piece of music was a total fluke. It was just sitting in the sidebar of Youtube, and I clicked on it. I’m so glad that you enjoyed this week’s Six. Thank you.

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  9. […] This week’s Six Sentence Story finds Brigid and Felreil on a paddle-steamer sailing the Rhône river. The Liturgy is here. I am […]

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  10. They’ve been trying to order the rivers to obey for centuries. Water goes where it will.

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