Twiglet #17 “Rattling Winter”

The Last Rattle

Two birds are
bickering in the grass.
They stop. Watch a girl
with blue shoes run
down the garden path.
The child’s hair
is the colour
of silvered honey,
licked by the moon.
She’s winter’s last rattle,
and the birds feel it
in the air.

 

 

written for dVerse “Nature” and Twiglets #17 “rattling winter”

17 responses to “Twiglet #17 “Rattling Winter””

  1. ooooh…winter’s last rattle……gave me chills

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  2. Two birds bickering —- I am smiling as soon as I read this line. Love it…..The imagery here is divine…including the little girl in her blue shoes 🙂

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  3. I’m sure the birds were starlings, they’re such fractious birds! I love your point of view! It made me smile.

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  4. I love the scene from the two birds point of view… it really made me wonder if the poor girl will get some cold wind soon.

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  5. Nice how birds look at us coming out to play to realize that winter is over.

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  6. Winter’s last rattle – chilly!

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  7. I admire that imagery of color – licked by the moon ~ The last rattle – I am thinking of the last snow drift ~

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  8. The birds feel it – indeed they do! This is delightful!

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  9. That rattle line is fantastic, but this is just divine:
    “the colour
    of silvered honey,
    licked by the moon.”

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  10. Oh I agree with De! Beautiful imagery in that line. I like the visual I got from the birds eye view of the blue shoes.

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  11. Beautiful poem. All I can say is…..wow.

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  12. Man, I’m glad the snows don’t hit here often. I lived where they did once. I remember once, going outside on a warm 37 degree day in just my t-shirt and being thankful for a warm sunny day.

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  13. i like what made the birds stop and curious…wonderful….

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  14. Oh, great imagery, and a touch of mystery. Maybe it was winter herself, taking a last run across the lawn before her time is up. She was here the other night, sprinkling a last frosting before spring shooed her out.

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  15. “Winter’s last rattle” I only hope so. Lovely piece this

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  16. I can see myself as a child, or even my grand-daughter running through this verse. 🙂

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