Twiglet #17 “Rattling Winter”

The Last Rattle

Two birds are
bickering in the grass.
They stop. Watch a girl
with blue shoes run
down the garden path.
The childโ€™s hair
is the colour
of silvered honey,
licked by the moon.
Sheโ€™s winterโ€™s last rattle,
and the birds feel it
in the air.

 

 

written for dVerse “Nature” and Twiglets #17 โ€œrattling winter”

17 responses to “Twiglet #17 “Rattling Winter””

  1. ooooh…winter’s last rattle……gave me chills

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  2. Two birds bickering —- I am smiling as soon as I read this line. Love it…..The imagery here is divine…including the little girl in her blue shoes ๐Ÿ™‚

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  3. I’m sure the birds were starlings, they’re such fractious birds! I love your point of view! It made me smile.

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  4. I love the scene from the two birds point of view… it really made me wonder if the poor girl will get some cold wind soon.

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  5. Nice how birds look at us coming out to play to realize that winter is over.

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  6. Winter’s last rattle – chilly!

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  7. I admire that imagery of color – licked by the moon ~ The last rattle – I am thinking of the last snow drift ~

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  8. The birds feel it – indeed they do! This is delightful!

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  9. That rattle line is fantastic, but this is just divine:
    “the colour
    of silvered honey,
    licked by the moon.”

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  10. Oh I agree with De! Beautiful imagery in that line. I like the visual I got from the birds eye view of the blue shoes.

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  11. Beautiful poem. All I can say is…..wow.

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  12. Man, I’m glad the snows don’t hit here often. I lived where they did once. I remember once, going outside on a warm 37 degree day in just my t-shirt and being thankful for a warm sunny day.

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  13. i like what made the birds stop and curious…wonderful….

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  14. Oh, great imagery, and a touch of mystery. Maybe it was winter herself, taking a last run across the lawn before her time is up. She was here the other night, sprinkling a last frosting before spring shooed her out.

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  15. “Winterโ€™s last rattle” I only hope so. Lovely piece this

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  16. I can see myself as a child, or even my grand-daughter running through this verse. ๐Ÿ™‚

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