dVerse “Sevenling”

A Flinch

I was
smaller.
Younger.
Sharper. Like gravel.
I spoke
in consonant chords.
In song.

I was like earthquake weather

 

 

© Misky 2016. for dVerse “Sevenling” themed music

24 responses to “dVerse “Sevenling””

  1. earthquake weather, such a unique metaphor to use. Still, it is a song, filled with consonant chords. I wonder how we describe ourselves now that we are older, smiles…

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    1. I’m still like earthquake weather, Grace. To the core.

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  2. earthquake weather.

    i like how you use such short lines. when iwas writing mine, i looked back at previous submissions and really liked those that went short on the lines. its like a quick snap. i will try to work on some brevity – it does not take away the impact.

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    1. Thought I’d try something different with this one. Works okay, I think.

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  3. Zing! Killer ending.

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  4. Such wonderful short lines. I love the brevity of each. I Sometimes think as poets, we try too often to just word it to death. The reason I love the Japanese poetic forms so much. You have certainly said so much with so few words. And you are still earthquake weather! Wonderful.

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    1. I’m glad you enjoyed reading this sevenling. They are such a delight to write.

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  5. nice – i love earthquake weather – and speaking in chords and song… yeah – kids do that..

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    1. … and adults who refuse to grow-up!

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  6. Oh yes… this is how it is… a sparkling quadrille… let’s keep the youth alive.

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  7. Very effective poem in all of its brevity. I’ve spent much of my life in earthquake country. It is so unpredictable.

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    1. I lived in Southern California for a few years, and had my teeth rattled more often than I’d wished. 🙂

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  8. “I spoke
    in consonant chords.
    In song.”…love this….the closing line is spot on! wow!

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    1. Thanks, Sumana!

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  9. Oh! this is absolutely stunning 😀

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    1. I’m not sure why, but I can never post a comment on your site. I loved your poem, and just wanted you to know.

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  10. Earthquake weather

    That says so much in so few words!

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    1. Thank you, Freya!

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  11. Ooooh! The title and closing line speak such volumes – well done 🙂

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  12. This packs a punch. I work with these little earthquakers and they really do have their own musical language. Enjoyed this, Misky.

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    1. Thanks, Mish. 🙂

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