1908: A Rum Dream Sestina

B&W photo beach Cuba during storm

A Rum Dream Sestina

The tide revealed more beach
than I’d ever seen. Dark, brimming
waves drinking in sand, and a black
mood of clouds shrouding tears
and chunks of sky. Gusts taking
to air our towels. Umbrellas. We two

women clamped our knuckled two
hands on our straw hats. The beach
emptied. Holiday-makers ran, taking
shelter in huts roofed with straw brims.
A lifeguard watched a waterspout tear
toward him. Bounced, pouring black

water from the sky, a spin of black-
ness, dark as midwinter night at two
when the world’s asleep. Light tearing
through the roof, sand from the beach
pelting the straw as the roof’s brim
rises and lifts, and the wind takes

possession of our hut. Steals it. Takes
it back, then dresses it in black.
I hear screams and grab at the brim
of my hat. We huddle together, we two
bony-knuckled women from the beach.
Wind howls as dark clouds of tears

empty rain on our heads. A rip, a tear,
and palms fall to the ground. It takes
a minute, maybe two, or ten, for the beach
to settle back into sand, the pitch-black
sky to settle back into light, and our two
hats to float out to sea. Ribboned brims,

spinning and hugging each wave’s brim.
Hats off with the fishes, we shed not a tear.
And it’s 2:00. Today: 2 February 2002.
Not that anyone here believes or takes
notice of omens or prophecies or black
magic. Not here on Cuba’s Varadero Beach.

It was a lazy day in Cuba on Varadero Beach
when my afternoon nap tore fright from a black
rum dream. And so, one more rum I did take.



Rules of a Sestina: A sestina is a complex 39-line poem that uses word repetition instead of a traditional rhyme scheme. It consists of six stanzas of six lines each (36 lines total) and finishes with a three-line final stanza. It’s a bloody nightmare 😂.

Some images created with Midjourney; all writing is my own work.©Misky 2006-2026.

17 responses to “1908: A Rum Dream Sestina”

  1. Admirable mental fortitude to pull off such a form.

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    1. My brain needed a challenge — several times I had to walk away from it and come back later. (grinning)

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  2. A beautiful poem 🙂 well done!

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    1. Thank you, Carol Anne.

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  3. It sounds like it’s a challenging form, but you pulled it off admirably. I loved your detail(s) about the bony-knuckled hands. Set and held the mood of the entire piece!

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    1. I walked away from it several times, hoping it would write itself, but it never obliged.

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  4. technical prowess (requirement of the particular form of pome) aside, vivid and engaging your were.

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    1. Thank you! I’m glad to know that you enjoyed reading it.

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  5. An excellent poem and that song… THAT SONG! How many times I heard it and saw it… Habana.

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    1. Thanks, Chris, and yes, that song — I just adore it, and when I stumbled across it again, I was so pleased.

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  6. Oh my. This looks like some serious mental gymnastics but it reads beautifully. .

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    1. It is, and I only subject myself to it once a year, but I’m so pleased that you enjoyed reading it. Thank you.

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  7. barbara_e_young avatar
    barbara_e_young

    Good one.

    Makes me want to do one. It has been long enough that I can actually think that.

    “Takes
    it back, then dresses it in black” is worth all the trouble.

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    1. Oh, yes, do!

      In truth, this took me several days. At one point, I scrunched it up and threw it into the bin … retrieved it and pressed it flat again (I always write with pen and paper drafts) and continued.

      You haven’t posted any poems for a while, have you? I miss reading your poetry; it’s just beyond excellent imo.

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      1. barbara_e_young avatar
        barbara_e_young

        I haven’t been writing. Chaos. Laziness. Lost my joy. But it has been niggling at me lately. I’m thinking something easy but impossible like a sestina might be a good way in. Failure is all but inevitable but fun is possible.

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        1. Fun, always, and always first, b. xx

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