0804: Six Sentence Story

ai b/w image view of Rhone River France

The Steamboat — The First Descent

Brigid’s Diary, Episode 06: April 1834

The steamboat called “Le Marsouin” shouldered the Rhône with a relentless thump-thump-thump, its side wheels beating water into obedience while the sound ran the banks like a bruise.

The engine breathed deep and hoarse beneath us, heat and hiss rattling the wooden hull until my skull learned the rhythm as a persistent ache.

The river smelled of itself, silt and rot and fish gone soft, and my wonder failed me as my stomach turned traitor.

Felreil held me at the waist while I leaned over the rail and gave back stewed meat, hard bread, and wine, and said only, “Let it go,” as if instruction could steady my body.

Around us the crew shouted in French and patois, children cried, and the whistle relayed its warning round every bend like a threat the river had already heard.

If this is what motion costs when fire teaches water to hurry, then I have seen the fringe of madness and know it passes from machine to bone and wears a human face.


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Written for Denise’s Six Sentence Story including the word “relay”.  Some images created with Midjourney; all writing is authentically my own original work.©Misky 2006-2026.

20 responses to “0804: Six Sentence Story”

  1. Sometimes, rare as they are, the reader forgets he is actually reading – ( similar to what happens in movies, although a viewer can be seduced more easily by cinematic sirens).

    When this happens, it is almost like a portal in space and time opens up.

    What is relayed through the lines of ink on paper, now is a voice, a smell, a knot in the stomach that keeps you from breathing.

    A fragment of the human experience.

    Agony & joy, tear & laughter, doubt & courage, fear & dear.

    Ah, yes… I just had such a moment.

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    1. This comment, your comment, is what keeps a writer on a path that is often silent and unrewarding. I am humbled. Delighted. Encouraged. And smiling.

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      1. And your choice of soundtrack… perfect.

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        1. Thank you! I had Spotify make me a playlist of Missed Connections: My Unheard Saved Tracks, and that song came up while I was polishing my Six. It was one of the first songs that added too my Liked list and hadn’t listened to it again. I’d forgotten that I really like Tom Waits’s voice and his style of music.

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  2. I love your final line, especially, the call for saner, more peaceful times.💙💚💙

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    1. Based on this afternoon’s news coverage, I think that’s unlikely.

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  3. Poor Brigid… I am with her though- if this is what progress feels like- leave me where I am!

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    1. From what I’ve read about these ships, and that particular period of time, if you stayed on deck for any length of time you were covered is greasy soot, and the river was more sewer than river — but it cut the time of transport by half compared to the horse-drawn carriages. Not a pleasant way to travel.

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      1. I always find it interesting how in past eras they just flagrantly polluted and lived like that’s just how things go…

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  4. I echo Violet’s “poor Brigid”. On top of everything else, to be seasick is to be miserable (I have never suffered from it thankfully, but I imagine it would be just as Brigid describes). I’ve come to look forward to your last sentences, Misky.

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    1. It was less uncomfortable than horse-drawn carriage, but it still had some major disadvantages. Ah yes, those last sentences — the hinge. I’m glad that you enjoy those. Thank you, Denise.

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  5. The smell of “rot and fish gone soft” would likely make me let it all go as well.

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    1. The thought of ‘fish gone soft’ is revolting enough!

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  6. your second sentence took me back to my days on a commercial fishing boat, “…rattling the wooden hull until my skull learned the rhythm as a persistent ache.” once back in port and unloaded the engine would be shut down, the silence was deafening.

    I too loved the last line, specifically: “…what motion costs when fire teaches water to hurry

    good read

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    1. Glad you enjoyed reading it. Thank you, Clark.

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  7. It’s so cool that every time I read your entries it feels like watching a movie. Or a series.

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    1. I am so delighted that it feels that way for you. Thank you, Reelika.

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  8. Excellently written with this great tale. I am enjoying this a lot, apart from the bit about throwing up.

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    1. Thank you, Chris. Glad that you’re enjoying it.

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  9. Sometimes all you can do is let it all go, holding on takes too much strength.

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