1003: Six Sentence Story

historical print of the Weavers Revolt in Lyon France.

Brigid’s Diary, 1834

The Crowd Becomes a Question — Episode II

The crowd tightened without warning, sound folding in on itself until every voice became an elbow.

I stepped forward because hunger has an arithmetic I know by heart, and the children nearest me were speaking it with their whole bodies.
Chopped language and uniforms surfaced like punctuation, blue and deliberate, asking for names as if names were the trouble.

Felreil swore once… low …and took my arm, pride cracking into motion as papers mattered more than blood.

We were carried sideways, the air percussion echoes and lead skipping the cobbles, the sound of shots floating briefly above the shouting before dropping back into breath and wool and doorframes, his hand iron on my wrist, mine still open toward the looms I could hear refusing to stop.

If a question can be made of bodies, then the answer is this: we lived by leaving, and the city went on breathing without us.

Saint Mesa x Nomé Naku – ‘WAR’




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Written for Denise’s Six Sentence Story including the word “float”. Some images created with Midjourney; all writing is authentically my own original work.©Misky 2006-2026.

28 responses to “1003: Six Sentence Story”

  1. May I say that the combination of posting both the Liturgy and the Six is quite remarkable.
    Because you expose for all to see the inner workings of your mind as it carves the upcoming story. Extraordinary!
    Brava, Marilyn.

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  2. I enjoy writing the Liturgy process of creating a Six, so I’m delighted that you enjoy the result. Thank you.

    This period of French history is considered by many to be more violent than The Revolution of 50 or so years previously. The July Monarchy was a nightmare.

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    1. Thank you! 🙏

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  3. I loved the way you ended this- we lived by leaving…. somehow that just rings with hope.

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    1. Good, I’d hope so — even in the midst of revolt, there’s hope.

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  4. Misky a great piece of prose, you manage to capture the frantic nature of a riot.The pacing feels breathless. The long, comma-heavy fifth paragraph mimics the momentum of being swept away by a crowd and that’s a perfect track too🙌

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    1. Thank you so much, and I am delighted that sentence took you alone with it.

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  5. Nice last phrase: “we lived by leaving, and the city went on breathing without us.”

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    1. Thank you, Frank.

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  6. Brilliant writing, M.

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    1. Thank you, Chris!

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  7. […] Thankful for Denise’s weekly Six Sentence Story prompt. Here’s mine for this week, and here’s the Liturgy/mind-mapping that forms the basis for this […]

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  8. wow. it’s so ethereal and yet so concrete…I find my hand reaching for the looms as well. I wonder where they’ll end up next?

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    1. Glad you enjoyed reading this week’s Six. Thank you.

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  9. enjoying this Serial Six

    ‘specially:

    “...sound folding in on itself until every voice became an elbow.

    lol*

    *a compliment, to wit: laughter sparked by surprise and fueled by (an) appreciation of creativity in expression

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    1. Thank you very much, Clark.

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  10. Hunger has an arithmetic, it’s one I’ve known, too. It makes me so sad to know any others have experienced it.

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    1. Hunger is a cruelty, Mimi.

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  11. Nice synesthesia! Why did I only tune into this on my second reading? ❣️

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    1. Some things are worth reading twice. 😂

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      1. Definitely true here.

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  12. Wow, a phenomenal final line!

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    1. Ah, nice hear you like it. ❤️

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  13. I read this as if the horror of condition and the violence initiated were a scene played out in slow motion. Reel without audio, yet the sounds that might have been, were well imagined. Such the effect on this reader – its grip does not release until the final sentence.  

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    1. That is a beautifully crafted comment. Thank you, Denise.

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