24 June: A Six Sentence Story

man and woman in the kitchen. man reading newspaper and woman washing dishes. In the style of Hopper

11 of 27: Drowndusk – Love buried beneath duty

A Six Sentence Requiem

Elira’s hands move through dishwater like archivists—scrub, rinse, stack; across the kitchen, Jonan sits sidewise at the table, lost in the morning newspaper, sipping coffee that’s as smooth as the wedding band she never takes off.

Felreil doesn’t hide in the shadows; he is the shadow—his presence a candle’s guttering—and he notes how her fingers graze the next plate, the way they grazed Jonan’s spine a while ago, a lifetime ago.

The word love dies in his throat, dissolves into a sip of black—dissolves into the space between their chairs, yawning wide as a museum hall where love’s artefacts are gathered under glass.

Felreil doesn’t pity their precision—the folded towels, the scoured plates—he venerates it: this liturgy of care that outlasts passion, these hands that chose duty long after desire forgot to knock.

The candle’s last gasp isn’t tragedy; it’s tender—a golden amen to the unsung hymn of promises kept—and when Felreil’s breath snuffs it out, the dark that follows isn’t empty: it’s full of the thousand small devotions that never asked to be seen.

Morning will come, and with it, the coffee, the dishes, the quiet—but for now, the kitchen holds its breath for a long minute, and the ghost of that lost touch lingers like a scent neither can name but both still breathe in.


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Written for Denise’s Six Sentence Story including the word “minute”.  Some artwork is created using Midjourney AI, and is identified as such in the ALT text or captioned. Images are copyright and not to used without permission, which I willingly give when asked, and when not for commercial use. Imagery and poems/prose ©Misky 2006-2025.

15 responses to “24 June: A Six Sentence Story”

  1. The liturgy of care that outlasts passion, this is the part I never got to. Beautiful but a bit heartbreaking at the same time.

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    1. Thank you, Violet. 🤗

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  2. Nice phrase: “this liturgy of care that outlasts passion”

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    1. Thank you, Frank.

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  3. “...long after desire forgot to knock.” Excellent.

    I’m enjoying these vignettes, Misky. And wrapping this one up, the last sentence a whisper of melancholy.

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    1. Thank you, and I’m glad you enjoy reading these.

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  4. Maybe this is where you land after the years of quiet desperation.

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    1. … perhaps. Thank you, Mimi.

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  5. my fave line:

    “…smooth as the wedding band she never takes off.”

    ‘a course, (can’t resist the alternate perspective, can I? lol) things that are smooth lack the imperfections and pitting that allow foreign objects to establish anchor points.

    love the illustration… the Machine gots a hankering for some Hopper?

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    1. …and I can’t resist saying that’s the perfect medium for moss to grow. (LOL) Yes, I Hopper to the image prompt when I wrote it.

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  6. How many dishes, how many cups of coffee… too many to remember. Such is life.
    And a beautiful painting…

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    1. Truer than true. I laughed as I woke this morning, realising one of my first thoughts was “what shall I cook for dinner tonight.”

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      1. Yep, that’s me too.

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  7. i loved it…i guess it happens everywhere…duty takes over love over time…its good they are still together though…

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    1. Exactly. Thank you for your thoughtful comment.

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