
Down by the towpath along the creek, walking against the insect noise and twists of roots from trees that no longer exist, past the rustling thistles of last summer’s dry shadows once indefinably green against the brittle sky . . . there once was a tall wooden fence as white and straight and even as milk teeth, and I always peeked through the knotholes just to see the other side.
in the wake of long grass
deep purple, bell-shaped flowers
the morning sun floats
for GoDogGo Cafe Haibun Wednesday, and Twiglet 270 “milk teeth” image from Unsplash ©Misky 2022 Shared with #amwriting on Twitter
14 responses to “GoDogGo Cafe Haibun Wednesday”
Fences and high walls have a fascination for children, don’t they. 😂
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And those who are still a kid at heart!
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Of course. That goes without saying!
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I love the long drawn out sentence… it feels like I’m straining to see past the fence and all the thistles too. And the haiku is lovely.
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I tried chopping up that long sentence, but I was aiming for a walking pace from the reader, which meant run-on extreme. Sometimes you have to break all the rules to get where you want to go. 😂
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Well I think it works really well.
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Thank you.
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Haibunilicious (as always) Misk.
(Friendly proofreader query: ‘peaked’ or ‘peeked’? Intentional? Either way…cool stuff! Thanks).
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Thanks, and thanks. Off to fixarooni.
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Some neighborhoods do not allow such fences. Though some fences are needed.
I like your description and the innocence of wondering. I am reminded of all the changes that have been made for progress… some not so good.
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Thank you, Jules.
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Misky, this is a beautiful haibun! You take the reader into the moment with succinct words and imagery – I especially loved “twists of roots from trees that no longer exist” – mwah!
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Thanks, Donna. Loved writing to the prompt.
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