dVerse Poets: Wayra Form
Ten Minutes After Dinner (draft version 1)
He is in a sleep
of see-saw, he breathes softly,
a rise and fall of his chest.
A light rumbling comes
from his throat. I turn off the moon.
Turn Off the Light (draft version 2)
He is in a sleep
of see-saw, he breathes softly,
a rise and fall of his chest.
Light shaves across his face,
I quietly turn off the moon.
Written for dVerse Poets. Poetry form: Wayra. The elements of the Wayra are: 1. a pentastich, a poem in 5 lines, 2. syllabic, 5-7-7-6-8, 3. unrhymed, 4. also include onomatopoei. © Misky 2021, shared with #apoemaday on Twitter
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15 responses to “A Wayra for dVerse Poets”
Happy to be introduced to this form. Yours is marvelous. I tried one, too. Thanks for sharing, Misky.
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Thank you! I like short forms, although I seem to be writing them lately. 😂
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Flows so well, and one can hear it all….
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Thanks.
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Gorgeous, gorgeous work done, Misky! I especially love; “A light rumbling comes from his throat. I turn off the moon.”💝💝
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Thank you!
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Yes. Lovely. That last line is magic. I like both versions.
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Thanks, Worms!
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I love both versions with a different take on the light and moon. There is gentle rhythm in your lines.
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Both are beautiful ….. turning off the moon is an amazing turn of phrase.
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I love both version, Misky. “Turn off the moon”: I don’t think I’ve heard a more evocative phrase for the end of the day, the end of romance but not the end of tenderness.
pax,
dora
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Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed reading them.
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You’re most welcome. 🙂
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The sense of turning off the moon is a so visceral.
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Interesting poem!
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