
A Lean In Close
In-between those growing-up
years, those kisses deep
as a double bass,
Bobby Darin pours from
the jukebox. He’s a
dark language I don’t understand.
Sounds malicious. Thirsty
words soft as a cotton
saxophone.
It’s an over-salted melody,
and Mac the Knife plays on.
Written to prompt at dVerse Poets Quadrille #131: 44 words (sans title) including the word ‘juke’, Shared with #APoemADay on Twitter ©Misky 2021 Photo by Tom Grove on Unsplash
54 responses to “dVerse Quadrille #131”
I really like your musical similes
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Thank you!
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Ha – i like the over-salted melody and, being a saxophone player myself, of course the words as a cotton saxophone – nice
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Hello! I was eating a handful of salted cashews, and that phrase just fell on my lap.
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Oooh, this is extremely vivid and vibrant in imagery. ❤
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Thanks, Lucy!
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Dark, but perky. He was still trying to escape teen heart throb-dom da-dom
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That song is still one of my favourite.
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splish splash! some nice touches in here…soft as a cotton sax…and the over salted melody…deep as a double bass…you set the scene well to go with the title…
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Thanks, Brian, and lovely to see you again.
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Oh, love the cotton saxaphone and the over-salted melody. I can imagine gazing into the jukebox now. Miss those days.
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Thanks so much. It’s fun to think how every table had its own music, and everyone’s preferences clashed with the next table.
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Ah, ” Mack the Knife”! I’d forgotten how much I loved that song. This challenge has been great fun.
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It was fun, wasn’t it!
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Smoooooth. Well done Misky!
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Yaaaaaaaah, man. Ta.
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I never did like that song. Smiles. But I LOVE your grey wolf!
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Aside from the over salted melody, I love: He’s a
dark language I don’t understand.
Thanks for joining us.
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Always a pleasure to join in, Grace.
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“In-between those growing-up
years, those kisses deep
as a double bass,”
I really like this stanza. Nicely done.
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Thanks very much.
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Honey on the mind. Beautiful!
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Thanks!
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I just went out to a lyrics site to see what the song actually says and it is chilling! Bobby Darin always gave me a creep vibe and now solid corroborating evidence to go with the vibe! Well-written poem, Misky.
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Thanks so very much. Glad you liked it.
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You’re very welcome.
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“He’s a dark language”
“Thirsty words soft as a cotton saxophone.”
Gorgeous.
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Many thanks for reading it.
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Great imagery to describe that jukebox swing. ‘Bobby Darin pours from the jukebox’ – I can hear him!
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That song is on my “Walking” playlist.
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mack the knife what a song thanks for the reminder. was one of my jukebox favourites
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Me, too.
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Brill!
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Thank you very much, and good morning to you.
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Good morning. 😊
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I love this- so beautifully done.
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Thanks, Linda.
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You’re welcome!
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Lovely imagery!
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In high school I played duets with my best friend .. she on the sax, me on my flute. Smooth stuff like Mr. Darin!
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Make that MR. please.
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Done
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Sounds lovely!
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Love this especially; “Thirsty words soft as a cotton saxophone.” Exquisite as always! 💝💝
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Thanks very much!
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So much to love about this, but I had to pause at this line…..”He’s a
dark language I don’t understand.” Stunning.
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Thanks!
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Yes. I liked that. Right songs, too.
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I love this – clever and beautiful!
❤
David
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But when you say Mack the Knife I think about Lotte Lenya…
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Oh, those wicked shoes!
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venomenal pumps
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I really like “Thirsty
words soft as a cotton
saxophone” and “over-salted melody”
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Thanks!
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