dVerse Quadrille #64

Quickly Around the Neighbourhood

The old house
on Hollow Road
is being gutted
like a mackerel.
Dust fouling the air.
How long can you
hold your breath.
These things
never happen quickly.

There’s a shopping trolley
in the creek, water
up to here.
It used to be fish.

 

 

dVerse Quadrille #64 “Quick” and Miz Quickly’s Whereness

31 responses to “dVerse Quadrille #64”

  1. Oh, this comes full circle so beautifully, Misky. LOVE “gutted/like a mackerel.” So visual.

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    1. Thank you, De. Love those Quadrilles!

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  2. I like your comparison of gutting the house and the mackerel.

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  3. A short take between urban renewal and urban blight. Either way, the fishes win. Nicely done.

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  4. Nice shot between mackerel, house, and the shopping cart where there used to be fish. Sad about the duality of urban blight and urban renewal.

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  5. How terribly sad to see those trolleys in the creek. Admiring the sensory smell:

    a mackerel.
    Dust fouling the air.

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    1. People can be such pigs…

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  6. “gutted like a mackerel”.. is such a strong image. Powerful write ❤

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  7. Votes are in: the mackerel is the winning line – but the last stanza is so pointed and well made. Great stuff.

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  8. Beverly Crawford avatar
    Beverly Crawford

    I am laughing so hard at the collision of language. “Shopping trolley” to me conjured up a picture of a streetcar in the creek! We call them shopping carts, so it was only after reading the comments I could adjust my image of the shopping trolley! Well written, and thanks for the lesson in English!

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  9. This is so good. I heard a documentary recently about houses being demolished and releasing lead into the environment, affecting the neighbours. Your poem reminds me of this with “dust fouling the air”. Then the image of the cart – perfection.

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    1. Thanks for reading it, and leaving me your comments. Much appreciated.

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  10. certain things that don’t happen quickly can be just as hurtful than those that do. the history of that creek is quite sad

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  11. I was taken by the title, Misky, and when I read your quadrille it made me realise that I don’t see shopping trolleys in ponds and rivers any more. When I lived in south London it was all too familiar, an everyday sight that riled me. Living in the countryside has given me a different perspective. I’m glad you reminded me of why I’m living here. We have fish. 🙂
    Back to the poem…
    The mackerel simile is brilliant and so is the way you conjure up the smell of dust from a demolition, another thing I haven’t experienced for so many years.

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    1. The water levels (and aquifers) are so low that most of the fish died. Water was too warm and not enough oxygen in it. It’ll be interesting to see if the creek recovers this winter.

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  12. I really love the way describe the gutted house… sad, and that transformation of the neighborhood… made me think about the song “This Ole House”

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    1. The gutted house is apt to see a whole new lease on life. It’s being rewired and plumbed, walls replastered, and kitchen refitted. It should be nice. It’s the process that’s disruptive for us on this street. Noisy, dirty, lorries parked everywhere …

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  13. Yes, unfortunately this scene is played out all to often…
    However I do like the home shows that take the worst house on the block and give it new and spectacular life.

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  14. So well done–reminds me of the work of the imagists: “So much depends on a red wheelbarrow…” Love it.

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    1. Thanks, Victoria. I’m glad you enjoyed reading it.

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  15. Changing neighborhood, house to be ‘gutted like a mackerel’ and drying up water with ‘shopping trolley’ where there use to be fish…continuity in expressions describing urban blight..nice write.

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  16. Oh! The shopping trolley in the creek…that used to be fish. So stark. And the beginning with the mackerel…well done!

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  17. A unique analogy with the mackerel and the old house. I could see that old cart in the creek!

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  18. I too loved the house “gutted like a mackeral”. Great poem. Thank you for posting it.

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  19. Change and decay…that image of the house “gutted like a mackeral” is a standout image for me.

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  20. “Gutted like a mackerel” love it!

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