Miz Quickly’s Bad Poetry Day

Miz Quickly asked earlier this week, or maybe it was last, that we take a rotten poem and rework it. Improvement is the aim. Well, my eyes are not what they used to be; my aim is off. This is still rotten, but I’ve started dreaming about this sucker, so it’s time to move on. Admit defeat. This is a stinker. (ps: I’ll come back to it another time; I’m determined to make this thing work.)

3 responses to “Miz Quickly’s Bad Poetry Day”

  1. I think I like the original. The problem could be “we.” Just an intuition.

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    1. Snap. I liked your original also. Maybe it should be first person….

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  2. I like the original – though they are similar.
    I think I know a few folks like your simmering lady.

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