A dVerse Response

Unalone

I have a friend
in stillness,
in the dark,
the cold
of snow,
the gaudy days,
the nights
of destitution,
in the quiet,
a moment, … almost,
the sweet voice
of wind, and
old skin.
That friend,
nay, that confusion
is a remote shadow,
scattering my thoughts.
I am unalone.

 

 

I Have a Friend

with whom I am confused, so alike are we in varying. I say a friend, and yet we never seek each other out, and seldom speak, but meeting often on the same ground — which is familiar no matter where we are — we lower our heads as before a mirror we rather did not see, despite or because, we are so similar.

—— William Justema (from the Poetry Foundation)

 
 

written for dVerse, “Write a Response to an Existing Poem

12 responses to “A dVerse Response”

  1. I like the idea in both poems of a friend that makes one “unalone”.

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  2. Your poem so very well describes a person in the depths of depression…where darkness, cold and loneliness are all they perceive. Very well crafted.
    Dwight

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  3. There is a music in this poem that is both beautiful and melancholy. The bookends of ‘Unalone’ draw it all together and I admire how you pulled me back to the opening with your closing lines. Marvelously crafted!

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    1. Thank you, and thanks for a very interesting prompt.

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  4. Nicely done, Misky! Indeed, we are “unalone” and have a friend in need…

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  5. This is my favorite part: a remote shadow,
    scattering my thoughts. I enjoyed reading the original text too!

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  6. I don’t know the poet or poem you jumped off with, but “…the sweet voice / of wind, and / old skin” put yours one up on the original. Isn’t it wonderful what happens when we play off a predecessor?

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  7. Unalone … that’s a wonderful way of finding a friend.

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  8. This. Ohhhhh, THIS:
    “the sweet voice
    of wind, and
    old skin.”

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