In the Dumpster for Miz Quickly

Conflicted

these are autumn’s dying days,
when my presence is a stain,
a conflict of colour with the sun,
when I am little more than
my shadow (it folds and fits neatly
beneath my feet),
and there it remains, constrained,
until I move.
or die.

 

 

for the marvellous Miz Quickly’s Dumpster Dive Based on the phrase “She listens to the dead men sing

16 responses to “In the Dumpster for Miz Quickly”

  1. Loved the rhymes and half-rhymes in this – sounds as good as it reads, and fantastic choice of image.

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  2. I love the thought of that folding shadow… really a good metaphor

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  3. I liked the description of the shadow fitting neatly between one’s feet.

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  4. I agree about the rhymes and half-rhymes and I also like the shadow that ‘folds and fits neatly beneath my feet)’. I feel a bit sorry for it, Misky, constrained and at the mercy of its owner.

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  5. Ah, there have been times I felt my shadow was holding me in place! You’ve captured the feeling beautifully!

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  6. The image is perfect for this poem!

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  7. Haunting words. I like the structure of this piece. Well done.

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  8. An eerie poem, so well done. I love the shadow fitting between the feet.

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  9. A conflict of color with the sun, I can feel the darkness lurking.

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  10. I love the idea of a folding shadow… such a brilliant metaphor!

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  11. There’s something frightening about this, but you make it sound almost like fun, laughing at death. Very subtly phrased!

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  12. I enjoyed this. Autumn is such an inspiring time for darker words. The image is great too

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  13. I find this a a delightful read. 🙂

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  14. I keep coming back to read thisd and each time I am sung a different song. Wonderful stuff.

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