Miz Quickly’s Day 6 & dVerse Pub Form

boytraintracks

Brushed Off

This was his landscape,
that young boy who played the streets,
whistled tunes and ran barefoot.
Happy ignorance,
his laughing days, each morning
caution raced him hand in hand.
And he brushed off death
when he took to chasing trains,
that young boy who walked the tracks,
always laughing, tempting fate.

 

 

poetic form: Choka (5.7.7+7). written for Miz Quickly’s “Brush” prompt and dVerse’ “Pub Form

14 responses to “Miz Quickly’s Day 6 & dVerse Pub Form”

  1. Young boys see themselves invincible – teenage is a time when you survive

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    1. Never a truer word’s been said!

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  2. The choka really flows and your words capture both the ignorance and innocence of the boy beautifully.

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  3. We have a relative who worked for the rails…always hard to keep folks away from the danger there. Some of the disused rails have been turned into long trail green-ways. Still youth is tempted not by silence but by the mournful whistles…

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    1. Our rails are electrified, so those kids turn to toast when they mess about on them. Literally. They’re 750 volt DC on the third rail system used in southeast England There are tall fences all along the rail lines, but that just seems to beg them to climb over. Daft kids.

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      1. Even with all the warning signs…the railroad still gets the short end being sued. I don’t know the volt bit here. But I’m sure if the sign says danger one should stay away.

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  4. Happy ignorance is the stuff of children and teenagers. I could just see that kid swaggering around town getting into mischief and chasing trains. Thanks for adding a great story to our choka prompt, Misky!

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  5. I stay away from those tracks ~ The young are always tempting, never thinking of what might and can happen ~ A scary prospect but it seems they are happy in their ignorance ~

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    Laura Bloomsbury

    the pace matches the vigour of youth and the approaching train – a brilliantly composed choka

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  7. “his laughing days”

    sigh. YES.

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  8. I grew up next to a railway line and remember our dangerous games. It’s a miracle we survived.

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  9. accidents is the most common cause of injuries and deaths among teenagers. i am glad you brought up this topic to us.

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  10. The naivety of teens — sometimes so foolishly happy-go-lucky they tempt fate far too often.

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  11. Tempting fate is a teen thing. The lucky ones remember with a chuckle.

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