dVerse Quadrille #18

cloudsgrass

Forty-Four Words About Clouds

I watched white-eyed clouds today
as they gnawed at the sky,

carved shapes that sang
of twisted and turning lifetimes.

They were incarnations
of dreams, of paused imagination

forged like cast iron mountains
and stretching long as cirrus grass.

I lay there. Watching. Drowning.

 

 

dVerse’s Monday Quadrille (i.e.., 44 words) #18: “Clouds”.

13 responses to “dVerse Quadrille #18”

  1. This is a haunting quadrille, Misky, from the ‘white-eyed clouds’ gnawing at the sky’ through the ‘carved shapes that sang’ to the ‘paused imagination
    forged like cast iron mountains’. Yes, you can drown clouds 🙂

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  2. I liked the idea of watching and drowning in clouds.

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  3. Wow. The drowning line throws a totally different complexion on the poem. Well written.

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  4. I like the inverted sense of the poem by drowning looking up.

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  5. This is like inverted lakes… to drown in clouds.

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  6. Deliciously dark and enticing ❤️

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  7. Great use of action applied to those cloud: gnawing, stretching–and there you are so passive: watching, drowning. Oops.

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  8. “as they gnawed at the sky” — something about this phrase tickles me pink, but also makes me feel a little mournful. i love it, misky.

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  9. white-eyed clouds ….. nice. I think they gnawed at the sky and your peace of mind.

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  10. I never thought of clouds gnawing the sky ~ Watching and drowning gives me sense it is metaphor of clouds ~ Love your take Misky ~

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  11. I lay there. Watching. Drowning.

    One has to tolerate some things that continue to seek their own paths.
    Agreed Misky!

    Hank

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  12. I like your poem very much…the idea of clouds gnawing at the sky is great 🙂

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  13. I was trying to figure out which line I liked the best to highlight it to you but I loved every single one…perfection, Misky!

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