A Little Night Air for Sunday Whirl #264 & dVerse

A Night’s Light Air

A lightness shines across the window,
lovers rise and fall like a wave’s song.
Whispered words in flakes were heard,
mutable turns of breathy phrase. Precise,
entice a bee to pollen, a cuttlefish flash
in cool moonlight — its iridescence is
night’s sparkling tapestry. Held, beheld,
this light air is a pale and thin veil.
A lover’s burn. Invisible and dim.

 

 

for Sunday Whirl #264. This week’s words: lightness, bee, cuttlefish, flake, sparkle, shine, mutable, veiled, precise, ignorant, tapestry, threat, and for dVerse The Reason for Rhyme.

19 responses to “A Little Night Air for Sunday Whirl #264 & dVerse”

  1. this light air is a pale and thin veil.
    A lover’s burn. Invisible and dim.

    A loved one may be unwittingly be ignored with no bad intentions by others but just that things around are not favoring him. It can happen!

    Hank

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    1. Thanks for reading and leaving me a comment, Hank. Always appreciated.

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  2. Each line is burning with iridescence and beauty!

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    1. Thank you! 😀

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  3. I love your use of internal rhyme, Misky. You have created a lot of atmosphere in this poem.

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    1. Thanks, Victoria. Glad you like it.

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  4. Oh I do love how your enhance this with the rhymes, and the wordle words seamlessly injected… very good.

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    1. Thank you very much!

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  5. Whispered words in flakes – I like that description, Misky, that’s how I tend to hear things at times!

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  6. What a beautifully written poem with a delightful illustration fitting it so well.

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  7. Such a spectacular subtlety in the rhyme enhanced by your vivacious words. Very nice.

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  8. Very successful – perhaps because you avoided the THREAT of failure! 🙂

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  9. What a concise and heady use of the promot words – effortlessly and breathlessly flowing..as if you sailed us into that painting

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  10. Wonderful writing Misky, beautiful flow and seamless integration of wordle words. Even the tone is as hushed as the thoughts and feelings you portray,

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com

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    1. Thank you so much, Elizabeth!

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  11. Oh, I love this, Misky. So, compact and it reads so well.

    Pamela

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    1. Thank you! Really pleased that you liked it.

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  12. Short. Tight. Spot-on.

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  13. Catching up with my reading and glad I came back around to read between the lines! Always a pleasure to escape into your words, Marilyn!

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