dVerse: Shun Enu Prayers

Shun Enu Prayers

I’m praying. It’s a nightly ritual. Like brushing my teeth, washing my face, pulling off my socks (right foot first). And it’s rained all day. A steady mist, it soaks into everything. Makes the air heavy. Makes my head heavy, too, my thoughts condense. There’s solitude in rain for good reason. And I pray for those who’ve died. For those dying. For those helpless and lost. Lost like salt in water – still there, the salt, but all you see is water. Bleak water from driven mist. It’s in solidarity with grey, in sympathy with drench and drowning. And I pray that those I love are happy and safe. Safe from the thick sky that fills echoes with soaking dark. And my prayers fall into a rhythm, dripping, dripping, and the earth becomes its flooded bowl.

my pen bleeds with rain
no words should ever drown but
I can drink no more

 

 

dVerse Haibun Monday “Rain” – shun enu is “Spring Misty Rain” (I think….)

38 responses to “dVerse: Shun Enu Prayers”

  1. Beautiful thoughts here — from the mundane of taking of socks, to the eternal of praying with the rains still coming….I especially like this last line “And my prayers fall into a rhythm, dripping, dripping, and the earth becomes its flooded bowl.”

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    1. Thank you, Lillian. I’m glad to know that you enjoyed it.

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  2. Josslyn Rae Turner avatar
    Josslyn Rae Turner

    “Safe from the thick sky that fills echoes with soaking dark.” Beautiful prose!

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    1. Thank you so very much. 😀 >

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      1. Josslyn Rae Turner avatar
        Josslyn Rae Turner

        You’re very welcome! 🙂

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  3. I admire the ritual of prayers and this part strucked me most:

    my prayers fall into a rhythm, dripping, dripping, and the earth becomes its flooded bowl.

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    1. Thank you, Grace. I tried something different this time, adding an element for depth beyond the theme. >

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  4. Laura Bloomsbury avatar
    Laura Bloomsbury

    the link line tying watery thoughts and prayers are subtly tied in with this line “my thoughts condense” – magnificent .

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    1. Thanks so much, Laura. I’m glad that you noticed those little connections. >

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  5. And I must add, how salt is added to water but is still there but all you see is the water….incredible thought that is. Such a sorrowful haibun. But praying as you always do and how it such a daily ritual for you – first the right sock…. of such mundane everyday things, true greatness is weaved. Your prayers for those who died and for safety for those you love. Your pen bleeds and after reading this, so does my heart. Beautiful

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    1. Thank you, Toni. It was a wonderful prompt.

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  6. Wow, Marilyn! This is truly exceptional. The closing haiku is a masterwork all its own!

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    1. You know how to make a girl very happy!

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  7. So many things to like here.. the salt dissolving in water… (and it does become like tears too)… but the little detail of right foot first is truly brilliant.

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    1. Thanks. I just love writing these.

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    1. Thank you. 🙂

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  8. Rain as prayer is a wonderful experience. Like you, I need those times of prayer to survive. I find the same experience with the songs of birds in the morning. I let them take over the praise when I seem incapable.

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    1. Precisely, Victoria. Precisely.

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  9. I especially love your haiku, Misky. Beautiful.

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  10. I like this take on the prompt and the haiku was perfect.

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    1. Thank you very much for reading it, and leaving your comment.

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  11. I love how the mood comes through your words. Especially love the haiku.

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    1. Thank you. I find haiku very difficult, so I’m glad you liked it.

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      1. You made it seem effortless and natural!

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  12. Like the haiku so much… the last line breaks so suddenly taking the reader to a different place.

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    1. Thank you. I’m really pleased that you liked the haiku.

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  13. Pray of rain.. a storm for
    me.. and truly all words of
    the massive one i STiLL
    work on oF Long Form
    Poem approaching
    4 Million words
    iS reAlly
    one LonG praYer
    and the 7 or 8 million
    words noW in oNLine beForE
    way too… a prayer of Death
    iN LIFE realiZed as LiFe once
    aGaiN.. noW a praYer of ReAL
    for oTheRs too.. iN this micro
    Verse of what WiLL be a tiny
    pARt.. of A 679th macroVerse
    tHere2.. LIFe is TrULy like that
    too.. particles like this..
    waves.. like that
    and Fields
    of Ocean
    whole Rain
    Water too
    under the
    wHole UmbrELLa
    oF God thAt IS A uNabridgeD
    Bible2 now named the human web
    onLine as wHole.. just adding anotHeR
    micro-Verse aS drops of Rain foR
    Ocean WHole iN multi-Uni-Verse
    oNLiNe
    REAL. NoW..
    or perhaps iT iS
    aLL a MagicK InCANtaTioN..

    OnLY
    ‘REaL Harry’
    kNows as MoonChiLd WiLL…;)

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    1. There’s a good bouncy rhythm in that one!

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      1. Thanks..
        My friend..
        Hope you are
        Having a great day..:)

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        1. And you, too. 😀

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  14. This is beautiful. I love your haiku. ..especially the final line “but/I can drink no more. “

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    1. Thanks, Bryan. Delighted that you liked it.

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  15. Wow!! Your work evoked many emotions but what a great experience reading this!

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    1. Thanks! Gosh. Thanks!

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  16. Rosemary Nissen-Wade avatar
    Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    This is stunning! A terrific piece of writing.

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    1. Thank you, Rosemary! I’m delighted that you liked reading it.

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