Miz Quickly Has a Few Words

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A Town Like Ours

This town’s worthy
of hate, its valley
cloud-soaked, flowed
with rain and smoke,
and dingy as old
grey sheets, a bed
unloved, a corner
where the sun
never shines bright
enough, where bells
plead and peal plain
expectation off-key,
off the back
of war that emptied
our town of hope
but filled it
with bunting glory,
glory to God and
to Generals and
bullets flying
thick as insects —
a bird’s dinner.
The wires overhead
still hum with rasp
conversation,
here in this
rain-water soaked
town, here where
I was born,
a town too easy
to forget.

 

 

Miz Quickly’s Words: bed plain dinner corner war flowed bright weekend and Poetic Bloomings: In-Form “Anacreontic Verse

14 responses to “Miz Quickly Has a Few Words”

  1. Shades of a song I dearly love by Simon and Garfunkel. I totally get the mindset, but am unable to write about my hometown with such urgency… too big, too self-satisfied. Love the wordplay in your poem.

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  2. Beautifully haunting..!

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  3. Specially like: where bells
    plead and peal plain
    expectation off-key-

    Hate or not, the town has character ~

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  4. bullets flying
    thick as insects —
    a bird’s dinner… what a strong, horrific image! Nicely done!

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  5. A poem as gritty as the town. Strong.

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  6. I think every street in every town has echoes of worse times. Maybe it’s just a matter how many layers of paint it has…

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  7. Not very attractive, your town. But your writing insists on being read!

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  8. empty of hope but filled with bunting glory —
    wonderful juxtaposition.
    short lines lean well here!

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  9. Oh my. I went to undergraduate school in a town in Pennsylvania that was essentially an abandoned coal mining town. Back then, in the 60’s, the old miners were still alive and suffering with black lung disease. So depressed but a beautiful countryside none-the-less.

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    So expertly writ your words made me sad. I know of grey towns where hope is lost…
    Anna :o]

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  11. Ravages of war are valid reasons to ask for a respite. The population deserve better but greed of strong nations just cannot be satiated. Might is right!
    Depressingly a subject to read but beautifully narrated Misky!

    Hank

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  12. What you did here is great. Will try the form. I’m reading this again to get the sounds of the words better.

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  13. Excellent form. This puts me in mind of some of the coal mining towns here in Virginia – most of the people live underground it seems working while the others stay topside and do their work, keeping track of those underneath. A grim reality but still, some hope.

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  14. this town’s worthy of hate…a line that grabs the reader’s attention, and every line after that kept the attention. Great write!

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