Rattling Along with Sunday Whirl

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Honey is the only food that doesn’t spoil” — anon

Cars rattle, and that could move
my dad to break into a howling burst,
an echoing drawl of purpled complaint.
And my sister and I, we’re split apart
by pillows and sleeping bags because
we encroach on each other like a red tide,
and we’re to search the car from pillars
and posts, and greased nuts and bolts,
and carpeted covers and chrome handles,
and tent poles, and pots and pans,
and rubber mats near rear-wheel wells,
searching noise of lost mechanical speech.
And while Mum grew pale over
the direction of maps, we were
enslaved to a lesser distress,
to make Dad’s car, still and quiet
as creeping moss.

 

 

written for Sunday Whirl. This week’s words are: food, cover, lost, howling, rear, draw, move, break, less, split, maps, still

13 responses to “Rattling Along with Sunday Whirl”

  1. I have had my share of kids in cars and am glad they have the same problem themselves now. Luckily my wife took no responsibility for map reading so I was on my own often taking the road less traveled.

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    1. Strapping them into car seats and booster seats solves that squabbling nowadays. No such thing when I was a kid. No seatbelts either!

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  2. There is a wonderful symmetry and rhythm to this poem – a clickety clack of memory and a fractious kind of togetherness!

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    1. Thanks. Clickety clack is good way to describe our holidays!

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  3. Wonderful picture you have painted with this poem! I really love the red-tide metaphor 🙂

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    1. Thank you very much!

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  4. “still and quiet as creeping moss” — I am particularly struck by this, and the sight of the two of you in the backseat, with a rift of pillows in between. I well remember road trips and the throng of “She’s TOUCHING me!”

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    1. And my two sons did the exact same thing. Kids! 😉

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  5. It happened with our kids and we would consign them to different parts of the camper (again, no belts in those days). Now the grandkids manage the same disruption, even strapped into their special car seats!
    Creeping moss could never describe any car occupied by either set!

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    1. My dad believed that kids should be seen, not heard. That kept us in line (for the most part) in such close quarters. 🙂

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  6. Love your writing, Misky.

    Love,
    Pamela ox

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    1. Thanks, Pamela. I hope to be around to read everyone else’s tonight. xx

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  7. I do remember those drives with some dread… especially the feeling of being warm and nauseous… (and fighting with my sister)

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