Toast
The
air seems
distant, no
landscape to see.
Dusty purple greys
the hills. The sky breaks out
in argument with weather
as air holds warm and motionless.
It’s one of those simple things,
like walking through fire to toast some bread.
written for Victoria’s dVerse Etheree prompt of building a geometric shape based syllables (1 through 10).
Oh, I like this!
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This is so good. If your air is motionless, come on over. We are having brutal winds here. We had to cover the tomatoes with plastic since they are still quite fragile. I love the irony of that last line.
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I specially like the personification of nature:
The sky breaks out
in argument with weather 🙂
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…like walking through fire to toast some bread …
So much in those few words.
Excellent!
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Ha – simple like walking through fire to toast some bread! That gave me a big smile.
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I like the image of the sky breaking out in an argument with the weather. I think they need to reconcile.
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Oh, oh, oh! I LOVED this. Your style is clean and elegant, and every line is packed with images that are stunning in their simplicity. “The sky breaks out // in argument with weather”– so good. And that last line! It’s got a wittiness, without toppling over into ‘cute’ territory. Love the calm, observant wryness of the voice here… excellent.
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I really love the sky in argument with weather, and the possibility to toast the bread.
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A lovely etheree, cleverly worked.
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Thank you, and good morning, Viv. >
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Thank you, Walt.
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That seems to a be favoured by many who’ve read it. Thanks, Rosemary.
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Love that zinger at the end…oh my goodness!!
The title is perfect , wrapping it all up in a perfect little analogical package.
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Thank you so much!
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Landscapes and
weather when places
without feelings are desert
eYes with pupils oF BLack wITh
so.. so.. little color.. sHades Of distance
break breath of LiVinG.. Rainbows cALL low
noW as poT Of GOld trUly coMe dorMant.. aWait
a
live..:)
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