#2

Grandpa’s Congregation

Our paradise was never erotic,
it was chocolate.

That’s what happens when your grandpa’s
a dentist – the cookie jar’s empty

We were witness to all his changes –
dentists don’t like to be dentists.

He liked the brief conversation though,
can’t speak with hands filling your mouth.

Endless cavities, root canals, pulling
threads between teeth, rare joys.

Grandpa was a bible bard; converting
people from sugar to God.

And he died in God’s good grace, filling
up more heads with God than silver.

 

 

Notes:
1) Poetic Form: American (Haiku) Sentences (17 syllable sentences)
2) Day 2 napowrimo 2016: “Family”
3) Sunday Whirl #245 words: brief, endless, erotic, witness, grace, claim,
feed, speak, root, threads, empty, rare

15 responses to “#2”

  1. Love this….from the very clever title right through to the very brilliant last line. There is both wit and warmth running all through this 🙂

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    1. Thanks, CC. Glad you liked it.

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  2. very good, form and content.

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  3. Love this one, Misky. And congrats on tripling up!

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    1. I still have poetic asides to tackle, but not sure I’ll manage!

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  4. I think your grandfather might have been my childhood dentist. They sound very very similar,

    Elizabeth

    No Blue Thing

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    1. We was a lovely man, truly. 🙂

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  5. If my grandfather had been a dentist maybe I wouldn’t be so darn fearful of them. This is a fantastic tribute to yours. I like the form, too.

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    1. Grandpa didn’t believe in novocaine, so it would’ve done your fears no good at all. I am near neurotic about dentists!

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  6. What fun this is and as you indicate true. It is hard to find dentist that is just right having had ones that if the tooth hurt the answer was to extract it to those that insist a gold filling is appropriate because it gives them the largest profit.

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  7. Converting people from sugar to God is a tough job – and my favourite line in this wonderful poem..i sensed silver – fillings, chocolate wrappers, hair – memory

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  8. Very nice piece.
    Great slices of dental moments and familial dental-grandfather insights.

    You pull words softly like a good dentist gently pulls teeth.

    Randy

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  9. Grandpa was a bible bard; converting
    people from sugar to God.

    Love it all….especially these two lines, the title and the final couplet. I have always been fearful of dentists and cannot imagine why anyone would want to be one. You list the tedium of the job well……but show his passion for the job through the title and final couplet. No novocaine??? Oh my…..wonderful man….tough profession. Wonderful family and grandchild in you! 🙂

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